Earl Gray

Earl Gray
"You can argue with me but, in the end, you'll have to face that fact that you're arguing with a squirrel." - Earl Gray
Showing posts with label Technique. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Technique. Show all posts

Friday, August 13, 2021

Ta-Da!

 


     When British troops landed in India the residents, who spoke unstressed tongues, noticed a similarity between the "Left!  Right!" marching cadence and the binary stresses of the English language.  We accept the alternating stresses but why do we describe our speech as iambic as opposed to trochaic?

     Part of the reason is in the effect of pronouns and articles on our subject-verb-object pattern:

"She saw | the boy."

     Another reason is that ending on an accented syllable sounds more momentous, decisive or conclusive.  Trailing off seems tentative, wistful, or uncertain.  Thus, our poetry is iambic (de-DUM) or, occasionally, anapestic (de-de-DUM), and very rarely trochaic (DEM-de), dactyllic (DUM-de-de), or amphibrachic (de-DUM-de).

     What do we do when we want to finish with a flourish?  In sonnets we go from ending lines with distant/alternating rhymes to a couplet.  Typical would be the ababcc scheme in this sestet:


Prairie Prayer


Come autumn, combines comb the fields
to harvest gold canola oil
for toast before November yields
its cold. Like whitened coffee, soil
beneath integument snow extols
the blood and bone of remnant souls.


     A less formal approach is to use extra stresses.  In iambic work this creates a "Ta-Da!" effect, often as part of a double iamb.  For example, we note the last line of "Kemla's Aloha":


Kemla's Aloha

You showed me home is a person not a place.
I watch as time collapses in your wake,
as every story, fully told, can trace
a common path, each stream to the same lake.

Classical Diaeresis  

     A more elaborate technique is classical diaeresis, ending a poem with a word in the verse's cadence.  For example, the first stanza of the iambic pentameter "Beans" ends with an iamb;  all previous disyllabic words are trochaic.

September came like winter's ailing child,
but left us viewing Valparaiso's pride.  
Your face was always saddest when you smiled.  
You smiled as every doctored moment lied.  
You lie with orphans' parents, long reviled.


     Hand this text to someone and have them read it aloud.  Notice how "reviled" sounds like a finale?  This parallels the finality of the parents' death.  By contrast, the second stanza uses the spondaic approach, creating a sense of lingering consequence.

As close as coppers, yellow beans still line
Mapocho's banks.  It leads them to the sea;
entwined on rocks and saplings each new vine
recalls that dawn in nineteen seventy three
when every choking bastard weed grew wild.


    The stanza contains two iambs, "entwined" and "recalls", but that final line begins with, arguably, three pounding iambs ("ev'ry choking bastard"), setting up another instance of diaeresis, but the slightly less conclusive spondee, "grew wild", leaves on a more ominous note.

     The first thing we should learn about any technique is when not to use it.

Sunday, June 14, 2020

How Long Does Poetry Take?

     How long does brain surgery take if you know absolutely nothing about medicine?  Use a club to knock the patient unconscious, drill through the skull, root around until you find something that looks out of place, rip it out, close the wound, and you're done!  As is the patient, but no one said anything about successful  brain surgery, right?

     Newcomers often ask how long it takes to write a poem.  It can take forever but, generally speaking, the answer depends on how good the poet and poem are.  Poor poets produce dreck at breakneck speeds.  Their process involves far fewer steps.

     Jotting down an outline can take minutes.  A newcomer may now say:  "VoilĂ !  We're done!"  First thought, best though, right?  Time to find an unsuspecting reader... 

     A slightly less raw neophyte might take the rest of the day to produce a draft.  (Note we didn't write "a first draft".)  Then they're done.

     If writing for the "publish or perish" academic crowd the journey is a little longer.  One has to inject some clever, original phrases.  A random text generator can help find the perfectly baffling modifier or metaphor.  One or two of these per poem should suffice.  Thus, we can finish in a weekend and ship the end product off to Poetry magazine or our university press. 

     Because it has to have objective merit, technical verse will take weeks--a month if free verse.  There is a trick to this:  Do the sonics before the rhythm.  Choose soft sounds for reflection, harsh ones for drama, and repeat them (as assonance, consonance, alliteration, or rhyme) as appropriate.  Attend to cadence last, either in meter or in rhythm strings (which distinguish free verse from prose [poetry]).

     At this point, what you have might win a Nemerov but it won't draw a crowd.  Why not?  Because we've forgotten that poetry is a mode of speech.  We need to gear it for an audience, not a readership.  We must perform it (or find someone who can and will).  This usually means memorizing it and practicing our presentation.  We have to sound natural, performing rather than reciting.  And certainly not reading.

     At no point onstage can we look up and to the right, a telltale sign than we're trying to recall something.  This is vital, since our eyes must be free to search the audience for hints of waxing or waning interest.  If the people at an open mic are leaning forward and shushing those around them, we have them.  (This, incidentally, is the greatest feeling in human experience.)  If, on the other hand, we see them slouching backward and whispering to each other we have work to do.

     Once we have something worth showing the world the final step is to create a video and post it to a public forum such as YouTube or Vimeo.  We will address the basics of this process in a subsequent blog.

     With talent, education, practice, inspiration, and some luck, an actual poet can often finish a work in two months.


Wednesday, January 8, 2020

Ten Steps to Writing Poetry

Earl Gray's 104th Law of Poetry

Q1. Why don't people read my poetry?

      This one is easy:

Reason #1:

      People don't read your poetry because poetry is a form of speech, not writing.  It is meant to be performed.  Aloud.  Not read.  Not read aloud.

Earl Gray's 154th Law of Poetry

Reason #2:  

      People don't read your poetry for the same reason you don't read theirs.  Or anyone else's.  No, it's not tit-for-tat or quid pro quo.  99% of golfers are duffers.  99% of chessplayers are patzers.  99% of bridgeplayers are palookas.  As in most avocations, 99% of poets are untrained and unskilled.  


Earl Gray's 35th Law of Poetry

 Q2. How can I get critics to read my poetry?

      Serious critics are few--there may be 200 worldwide--and extremely busy.  You'd have to master the basics and show determination before attracting such help.  Unless you are self-motivating, it is a Catch-22, like trying to get a job without experience...or experience without a job.  Lurk for a year on critical forums such as Poetry Free-For-All or Eratosphere before posting there.


Earl Gray's 56th Law of Poetry

Q3.  So what do I need to learn?

#1:  Humility.  Observe Scavella's Mantra:  "I'm not as good as I think I am."  
 
Earl Gray's 109th Law of Poetry
 #2:  Be teachable.  Tutor's motto:  "We can work with the clueless but not the clueproof."


Earl Gray's 44th Law of Poetry
#3:  Respect the art form.  Avoid the Convenient Poetics trap.  Learn why you will remember phrases from the great poems of the 21st century long after you forget everything else you read this month.

Earl Gray's 76th Law of Poetry

#4:  Start with a useful definition:  Poetry is verbatim.

Earl Gray's 67th Law of Poetry
 #5:  Learn basic scansion.

Earl Gray's 31st Law of Poetry
#6.  In five years, consider free verse (which doesn't mean what you think it means).

Earl Gray's 11th Law of Poetry
#7:  Learn sonics.

Earl Gray's 11th Law of Poetry
  #8:  Learn the difference between voice (which varies from poem to poem) and style (a usually unfortunate consistency between poems).

Earl Gray's 19th Law of Poetry

Earl Gray's 79th Law of Poetry
#9:  Practice performing in front of mirrors, then open mic crowds.

Earl Gray's 84th Law of Poetry
#10:  Post your finished performances online (e.g. YouTube).  Include that link whenever you submit text.

Earl Gray's 106th Law of Poetry
Q4:  This sounds daunting, doesn't it?

      Actually, no.  It can be the ride of your life.
Earl Gray's 57th Law of Poetry - Pearl's 1st Paradox

 Q5:  Can you give me a definition of poetry more involved than "verbatim" or "memorable"?

      Sure.

Earl Gray's 182nd Law of Poetry - Pearl's 4th Paradox
      Any other questions?