tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3761818636919513619.post4304423799013822799..comments2024-03-28T02:17:51.115-05:00Comments on Commercial Poetry: 10 Greatest 21st Century Poets - The ListUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3761818636919513619.post-80655239654165560872016-02-04T18:52:03.584-06:002016-02-04T18:52:03.584-06:00On the plus side, there is more attention to sound...On the plus side, there is more attention to sounds than one expects from a newcomer. My advice would be to focus on rhythms and narratives, especially in longer works. Avoid overmodification, especially if it leads to "barnacling" (i.e. where one could insert some variation on the word "barnacle" and make about as much sense as the original).<br /><br />Does that help?Earl the Squirrelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03740374291537401772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3761818636919513619.post-77219600070742316932016-02-02T19:31:29.130-06:002016-02-02T19:31:29.130-06:00Truly appreciate your feedback on this talented te...Truly appreciate your feedback on this talented teenager poet's poetry blog. Thank you http://ideaswithink.com/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3761818636919513619.post-64746651027818020862015-03-26T19:04:16.865-05:002015-03-26T19:04:16.865-05:00From a technical point, it is six syllables and on...From a technical point, it is six syllables and only 4 vowel sounds in total. From a "sound and sense" point of view the harsh plosives, highlighted by the consonance of "t" phonemes, is effective. As an image it crackles, albeit not necessarily with originality. All in all, remarkable--especially compared to the rest of his text. What's not to like?Earl the Squirrelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03740374291537401772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3761818636919513619.post-71228276726283497792015-03-26T13:12:10.864-05:002015-03-26T13:12:10.864-05:00"lightning stitching the sky" is actuall..."lightning stitching the sky" is actually pretty awful.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com